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### Spellhold Studios _ Arath Dialogue _ Two Aerie Talks up for dissection!

#### Posted by: Riviera Mar 25 2007, 08:11 AM

May have to be chopped and spliced a bit. I'm not entirely sure I got Arath down correctly.. but that's why it is here for commentary, after all.
#1
Arath: Aerie.. has anyone told you that you have very pretty hair? It is the color of wheat.
Aerie: Oh.. umm.. no. Th..thank you!
Arath: Really? I suppose it was their loss, to not notice such beauty when it is before them.
Aerie: (blush) Errrr.
Arath: I will have to make up for their lack, I believe. A compliment never hurt anyone. (wink)
#2
Aerie: Arath? Y..you are a druid..
Arath: At least, I've always thought so.. (grin)
Aerie: Oh.. err.. now I feel silly. I.. was just going to ask.. do you know of a way to make hand lotion? I know it sounds.. a bit frivolous.. but I ran out of my rose lotion that I brought with me from the circus just the other day.. and..
Arath: Of course. When we stop to rest next, I can show you how to make it. It would be a shame to see such delicate hands not be treated with care.
Aerie: Th-thank you!

#### Posted by: K'aeloree Mar 25 2007, 01:59 PM

Hows this?
SoA - Arath/Aerie 1
Arath: Your hair is - very beautiful, Aerie. Has anyone ever told you that?
Aerie: Not really... Thank you, I g-guess.
Arath: It was their loss, failing to notice such beauty when it was right there in front of them. I'm sure many cry themselves to sleep each night for their lack of it.
Aerie: Uhm....
Arath: I will have to make up for the lack of compliments sent your way, it seems... such a flower should be admired, not trodden upon as these fools do.
Aerie: S-stop it.. I'm not beautiful.. (sigh)
Arath: I wouldn't be so sure.
SoA - Arath/Aerie 2
Aerie: Arath? Y-you are a druid, right?
Arath: I've always been under that impression, yes - of course, I *could* be wrong.
Aerie: Oh, err, I feel a little silly, now... I was just going to ask - do you know of a way to make a hair cleanser? I know it sounds.. a bit frivolous.. but I ran out of mine which I brought with me from the circus yesterday, and...
Arath: Of course. When we next stop to rest, I can show you how to make it. It is really quite simple, and it would be a shame to see such a delicate head of hair treated with care.
Aerie: Thank you! I'll- I'll have to make you something in return...
Arath: Oh, your thanks is enough. And your smile.
InParty("Jaheira"): Arath, cease this at once - Aerie wants nothing to do with your conniving compliments, nor your bedroll!
Aerie: Jaheira, I can speak for my... oh...
Arath: As you wish, 'Mother'. I'm sure my words could be put to far better use than arguing with yourself.
SoA - Arath/Aerie 3
Arath: Aerie, would you *please* stop sniveling? It makes you so much less attractive. Let a smile grace your features, rather than your habitual frown of displeasure, or your hopeless sighs. I'd almost say you were a member of the gentry, sometimes, the expressions you bear!
Aerie: Y-you try being me, then.. you have not lost what I have! You.. just cannot understand, and you are too arrogant, and full of yourself, to even try!
Arath: Full of myself? Aerie, really... I'm offended!
Aerie: S-so you s-should be! You a-always care only about yourself, and not a-about anyone else!
Arath: So is *that* why I made you that hair lotion a while back?
Aerie: W-well, you've d-done nothing nice since then... you- you haven't even s-spoken to me!
Arath: There's no point listening to people whine. It only grates on the nerves.
Aerie: Hmph...
ToB - Arath/Aerie 1
Aerie: Oh, curse it... these stupid sandals...
Arath: Did you just *swear*, Aerie? Who are you, and what have you done with the frail, pathetic elven girl we once knew?
Aerie: Oh, very funny, Arath. Are you going to help me, or not?
Arath: Oh, fine... here. Now, is that any better?
Aerie: OW! N-no, stop that! Arath, please...
Arath: What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger. You're proof of this fact - and you'll survive, somehow, I'm sure.
Arath: Oh, for Silvanus'... do it yourself, Aerie!

#### Posted by: SConrad Mar 29 2007, 07:43 PM

Liam says: Arath/Aerie
Sebastian says: They're gonna need editing.
Liam says: Of course.
Liam says: But are they somewhat how you envisioned Arath?
Sebastian says: Third seems a bit... meh.
Sebastian says: In the first two, I would phrase him a bit differently, but it's the general attitude I thought, yeah.
Liam says: What about the ToB one? *g*
Sebastian says: I'd cut the last three lines.
Liam says: *g* Okay
Sebastian says: The first four are quite okay.
Sebastian says: Then... it just gets boring.
Sebastian says: You're not saying anything in the last three lines you haven't already said in the first four.
Liam says: True.
Liam says: I'm just trying to think of ways to make him less... good.
Sebastian says: Maybe the 'less good' Arath should come forward more when he's not talking to a LG hot elven lady he's trying to bed?
Liam says: Trueee.
Sebastian says: I definitely see him telling people what they want to hear.
Sebastian says: And in saying what he says to Aerie, you already have his 'less good' character right there.
Sebastian says: It's not the words themselves, but the reason and motives he has for saying them in the first place.
Sebastian says: We're going to have to make it slightly more apparant, but otherwise, I think we're on the right track.
Liam says:
Sebastian says: He needs a bit of smugness when talking to Aerie, but that's it, IMO.

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