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[Vita Muerte]

I've read Divine Lineage at www.fanfiction.net., and I'm glad to see it here.  I like the direction the story is taking.  Sometimes it helps not having the game's entire dialogue be paraphrased; I usually find originality to have more substance.

As far as your English goes, let?s just say that some native speakers are worst off than you are.  If you need help with proofreading, I'm sure some fellow gamers wouldn't mind giving you a hand.      Me, I'm no Shakespeare... but I do know what I like.

[Erephine]

I'd be willing to help out with proofreading, but then again, my writing style isn't particularly good either.

I'm glad you're back with a new story. It's always a pleasure to partake in your active imagination. ^.^

[Celestine]

I've read Divine Lineage at www.fanfiction.net., and I'm glad to see it here.  I like the direction the story is taking.  Sometimes it helps not having the game's entire dialogue be paraphrased; I usually find originality to have more substance.

As far as your English goes, let?s just say that some native speakers are worst off than you are.  If you need help with proofreading, I'm sure some fellow gamers wouldn't mind giving you a hand.    Me, I'm no Shakespeare... but I do know what I like.

Thanks so much Vita Muerte. There'll be more originality later on, I promised.

[Celestine]

I'd be willing to help out with proofreading, but then again, my writing style isn't particularly good either. 

I'm glad you're back with a new story. It's always a pleasure to partake in your active imagination.  ^.^

Lightspeed, I'm so glad you like it. Jolyth's helping me with the proofreading, though I haven't finish writing the next chapter yet.

Thank you so much for offering.

[Shadowhawke]

I hold with Lightspeed. . I always enjoy reading your imaginative work, which is always superb in both plot, characters, and flow. And as a second language writer, Celestine, you are magnificent!
Can't wait for the next installment!

Edit: By the way, Lightspeed, it's not ethical to lie to potential people you're helping. . You are a fantastic writer.

Edited by Shadowhawke, 15 July 2005 - 11:42 PM.

[Celestine]

lol, thanks so much Shadowhawke. Next installment is posted. Work's keeping me very busy but I hope to at least post a chapter each week. Fingers cross.

[Shadowhawke]

I like the new chapter, Celestine. Interesting inner battle with the Slayer and the inner struggle with Bhaal, and also nice kind of completion to the chapter. Nice work.

[Celestine]

Thanks Shadowhawke.

[Shadowhawke]

No problem, Celestine. You deserve it. Now, eagerly awaiting the next chapter.

[Celestine]

Thanks Shadowhawke. Next installment will be this weekend (hopefully), I had only typed a few paragraphs so far. Bloody job of mine takes up far too much of my weekend. :glare:

[Vita Muerte]

Great job! Sorry, I hadn't commented earlier, but my attention span suffered severely this last week. Anyway, you seem to have a knack for writing very realistic battle scenes; it almost feels as though you were there. I love the Imoen-Rivian interaction, btw. Can?t wait for your next chapter.

P.S. Don?t work too hard.

[Celestine]

Thanks Vita. I'm hoping to write something later or tomorrow. My boss's still not letting me off even on a Saturday. >.<

[Shadowhawke]

Nice new installment, Celestine! Aww... poor Ano. . Still, nicely written on the part of the Tree of Life.

[Celestine]

Thanks Shadowhawke.

[leahnkain]

I have enjoyed reading "Divine Lineage". I especially enjoy how you have written the battle scenes. I look forward to reading more when you have time to post some more of the story.

[Celestine]

Thanks. I'm sorry I haven't been posting lately. Things have been hell busy for me and it kinda got worse when I dropped everything and went on a 3-weeks vacation. Well, I'm back and hope to start writing soon. Thanks for the reading and reviewing.

[Shadowhawke]

Thanks. I'm sorry I haven't been posting lately. Things have been hell busy for me and it kinda got worse when I dropped everything and went on a 3-weeks vacation. Well, I'm back and hope to start writing soon. Thanks for the reading and reviewing.

That's okay, Celestine. . We're all glad you got a well-deserved vacation.

[Erephine]

Welcome back.

I think I speak for everyone when I say we're eagerly waiting for more.

[Celestine]

I'm back and should have a new chapter by this week. *fingers crossed* Thanks everyone for your comments and support. That really help me going.

[Shadowhawke]

I'm back and should have a new chapter by this week. *fingers crossed* Thanks everyone for your comments and support. That really help me going.

Welcome back, Celestine! Cool new chapter. The tactics shown in the final battle are interesting... the idea of the two Slayers battling it out is quite... ironic? Wrong word... but you know what I mean. Good to see you back.