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[Solar's Harper]

Thanks Celes, the next chapter seems to be going a bit more smoothly than I expected, should be ready soon.

[leahnkain]

I just noticed that you updated the story. I am really enjoying your take on the CA NPC's. It is nice seeing Kessa(the amber eyed elf), I especially enjoy how you are including new elements to the story. I am looking forward to seeing Althon and Icar. I wonder how you will write Vildamyr. Solar, now that you are a member of the CA team you are more than welcome to add some of these elements into the CA storyline. (or a druid...)

[Solar's Harper]

Hehe, I've been wondering that myself, particularly with Vildamyr. The main point is to differ this story from the main line of the mod just enough to not be totally alien to each other, but not the same.

As for being a modder to the project well... I'll go over that with you in PM and in the forums shoud the opportunity work in everyone's favor, particularly in reference to the gap of druids.

Shop talk aside, I'm glad you liked it Leahnkain.

[quinlan]

Hi,

I liked especially the dream sequence. It was quite vivid. The fight in the city was good, too. And the touch ot Shadow's secret background...

[Solar's Harper]

Hi,

I liked especially the dream sequence. It was quite vivid. The fight in the city was good, too. And the touch ot Shadow's secret background...

All in the hopes of keeping the feel of SoC fluid to the scene and character, thanks Quinlan.

[Shadowhawke]

Good last chapter, Solar's Harper . I too liked the hint of Shadow's background... whenever the Zhentarim are involved, it always seems to get interesting... just one little thing. Was Logan Coprith the mayor of Trademeet? Or is this some thing I'm unaware of because I haven't played CA?

Anyway, keep it up.

[Solar's Harper]

Good last chapter, Solar's Harper . I too liked the hint of Shadow's background... whenever the Zhentarim are involved, it always seems to get interesting... just one little thing. Was Logan Coprith the mayor of Trademeet? Or is this some thing I'm unaware of because I haven't played CA?

Anyway, keep it up.

Yep wherever Zhents go, you can be sure to have a movie in the making.

And you're right about that Shadowhawke, Logan Coprith is indeed the mayor of Trademeet, but there is an NPC in a nobleman's (instead of armor-clad fighter) avatar that serves as the mayor of Saltmarsh; though I be on the CA team at this current time, I'm not too sure as to the origin of this nifty coincidence. I'll leave it to someone in the know to answer that question.

Thanks as always for the review Shadowhawke.

Edit: Ze typos return

Edited by Solar's Harper, 18 May 2008 - 05:06 AM.

[quinlan]

Hi,

I will call this last a transitory post. Well, you cannot have thrill and action at all time.

Evading the bullet the rest of us have to bite...

I assume he was talking about a sling bullet?

[Solar's Harper]

Hi,

I will call this last a transitory post. Well, you cannot have thrill and action at all time.

Oh so true, I would quote Jan here but nah.

I assume he was talking about a sling bullet?

Mhm, although this is the Forgotten Realms, you may never know until it is gone, no?

It was either that or biting the dagger or hatchet though, so I decided for the less lethal approach - sling bullets leave a hard knock to the head though so I might've been over the level again.

[Shadowhawke]

Even though it wasn't all action and thrills, I must say that the intrigue caught my interest very nicely. I would say instead that my only minor nitpick with this chapter was that I felt some of the events weren't explained enough or fleshed out, but that's my only gripe! And I've got to say, the picture of the assassins watching over them was quite creepy... nicely done.

[Solar's Harper]

Even though it wasn't all action and thrills, I must say that the intrigue caught my interest very nicely. I would say instead that my only minor nitpick with this chapter was that I felt some of the events weren't explained enough or fleshed out, but that's my only gripe! And I've got to say, the picture of the assassins watching over them was quite creepy... nicely done.

Nice to hear the effect wasn't lacking too much.

Some things were intentionally left in the dark, but as for the whole issue at the start of Feralin and crew, I basically had to cut a scene or two because it wasn't maintaining fluidity with the rest of the chapter, and also was going nowhere - so in other words I had to leave out the action and thrills, but keep in the mystery.

I'll see if I can fix that up somehow in the next chapter - which will be longer, rest assured. Thanks for the post, Shadowhawke.

@Leahnkain: Hehe, don't worry Althon will be getting his spotlight soon enough, as will every other character along the pathway have their own in due time.

As for the dialogs, I'm working on it.

Edited by Solar's Harper, 03 June 2008 - 12:55 AM.

[leahnkain]

I enjoy what you have done with Shadow and Candella. I like the intrigue of the story. (I actually got an email asking where is Blush.LOL)
A lot of your ideas are really good and some of the new ideas which you have written can fit into CA anytime you like. Shadow in particular has really gained a whole new depth to her character.

Edited by leahnkain, 03 June 2008 - 12:56 AM.

[Shadowhawke]

Ah, and the Sahuagin have come into the picture too. I'm really interested as to where you'll take this next, Solar's Harper. The sheer amount of parties involved in the intrigues promise a lot. Just one finicky thing I thought I'd mention; I felt like the flow of your chapter was broken a bit by all the different scenes and places and viewpoints that you put in. Perhaps the flow could be smoothed out if you segued the scenes into each other a little more, or didn't put as many different scenes in one chapter? Just a thought. It didn't detract that much from the overall chapter at all.

Nitpicking aside, I really liked that brother/sister moment... I thought that was very sweet. Looking forwards to more.

[Solar's Harper]

Ah, and the Sahuagin have come into the picture too. I'm really interested as to where you'll take this next, Solar's Harper. The sheer amount of parties involved in the intrigues promise a lot. Just one finicky thing I thought I'd mention; I felt like the flow of your chapter was broken a bit by all the different scenes and places and viewpoints that you put in. Perhaps the flow could be smoothed out if you segued the scenes into each other a little more, or didn't put as many different scenes in one chapter? Just a thought. It didn't detract that much from the overall chapter at all.

Nitpicking aside, I really liked that brother/sister moment... I thought that was very sweet. Looking forwards to more.

Aye I had a feeling it wasn't flowing as smoothly as it should've been, thanks for pointing that out Shadowhawke.

It was longer initially, and less flowing particularly around the action sequence on the smuggler boat, which the shapeshifting was supposed to make a return, and Aleigha was also meant to be with the group. As it turned out however, it kind of dragged on too much and eventually cuts needed to be made.

Glad you liked the brother/sister moment though, I had a fear I made it all too narrated that it would ruin the magic of the scene, but I won't argue on logic so.. Thanks.

Edited by Solar's Harper, 23 June 2008 - 09:05 PM.

[leahnkain]

I really enjoyed reading the last chapter; it shows Althon for who he truly is. I think the story really captures the reader.

[Solar's Harper]

I really enjoyed reading the last chapter; it shows Althon for who he truly is. I think the story really captures the reader.

Thanks Leahnkain.

[Shadowhawke]

Eh, apologies for the delay in reviewing, Solar's Harper... I really need to learn to glance down a bit more and give myself more time out of rl. But yes, an interesting new chapter! The 'demonic' sword really got my interest, as well as the fusing concept. Is it a canon part of CA or your own invention? Whichever it is, you introduced it quite nicely.

[Solar's Harper]

That's alright Shadowhawke, I'd be poking myself in the eye... both of 'em, if I wanted people to be prompt in reviews.

The double-sided blade, the fusion process, and with the whole 'possible' demon reference was my own imagination running rampart for reasons that will be revealed in due time.

Thanks for reading again.

[leahnkain]

I didn't notice the last chapter until now. I really enjoyed reading it.

[Solar's Harper]

Just an update on what's going on behind the scenes, and an annoucement of sorts for anyone who's interested in reading. That and I felt I needed that some groan worthy explaination was needed.

Currently the next chapter of SoC is shall we say, drowning on writer's block. In a very bad way too, been rewritten more than 16 times (yes I've been keeping count) already and I doubt that stopping anytime soon.

So for now, I've decided to stop working on the fiction until further notice, although knowing me, it could very well be a short time later I start up again.

Basically got a lot to do with attempting to improve on writing style once again, and on how to proceed from what is admittedly, a rather slow amount of progress fiction wise.

The good news out of this dribble is there's likely to be more work on the one shots, other extensive fanfics (possibly) and more importantly, mod work. Just nothing new on SoC until that breakthrough right in the middle of uh.. something, happens, like it does with inventors and the like.

So anyways yeah, fin-of-babble.
Once (if) a new chapter is up though, consider that a sign the grave has been dug up again.

And thanks for the support and constructive critcism on SoC folks, I'll be sure to keep as much of it as I can in mind. No guarantee that'll work though, given that I have a habit of forgetting what day it is. Seriously.