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[Shadowhawke]

Wow! I must admit, I've never even thought about that concept before... but it's amazing. A great start - it's a little disorienting to switch between tenses, but overall the scenes read smoothly and build up a beginning to something that I can't wait to see unfold. Thanks to everyone who contributed to the idea.

[cmorgan]

I agree on the tenses switching - Going back for another rewrite. I am still fighting POV switches, and so on. Fun challenge, though!

[TC Dale]

Interesting and well-written, but ... is that all? Or are there going to be more? It'd be a pity if this was all there was.

[cmorgan]

Interesting and well-written, but ... is that all? Or are there going to be more? It'd be a pity if this was all there was.

Fortunately or unfortunately, the PbP materials alone allow for 9 separate full participating characters, not counting cameos and the DM notes... the problem will not be length, but editing and writing for narrative. Right now, Michner and Hebert (Centennial/Hawaii, Dune) are decent folks, but this is a fanfic by an amateur for fun. I am trying to tailor my penchant for purple prose and Tolkienian/Baumian Wall Of Text™ Backstory And Description Pages, with little success


So, lots more. Some written by me, and some taken directly as joint posts with a minimum of editing. No novel here, that's for sure - the POV switches are killing me. Plus, it might be fun to play with author's styles. Sayer's "Clouds of Witness", told through correspondence... Cool idea.

[Shadowhawke]

Well now, I do have to say that I like how Iain's character came out a *lot*. The chapter worked really well in that regards; introducing characters, linking us to the old BG world. I like the realistic treatment of the BG situation on the culture (Nashkel's finest) and in general. Looking forwards to more.