Comments on "Fatherly Concern"
#1
Posted 13 August 2010 - 05:40 PM
Okay, that was officially awesome. . I loved the way you told it too... just the right length and description to deliver it at the end. Aside from a grammatical error or two, it was a really smooth read. I hope if inspiration bites again that you'll share it with us.
Through lightning, travel shadow,
Through hell and all above,
Surviving sword and arrow,
Bound stronger by the love
***
And in the end a witness,
To where the death has lain,
Silent through the sorrow,
Where innocents lie slain
#2
Posted 14 August 2010 - 05:23 AM
And possibly a new nose. When you snort tea down it laughing, it doesn't half hurt
Edited by Bluenose, 14 August 2010 - 05:26 AM.
Back from the brink.
Like RPGs? Like Star Wars? Think combining the two would be fun? Read Darths and Droids, and discover the line "Jar Jar, you're a genius".
These, in the day when heaven was falling,
The hour when earth's foundations fled,
Followed their mercenary calling
And took their wages and are dead.
#3
Posted 15 August 2010 - 08:36 AM
Hey Gorzag!
Okay, that was officially awesome. . I loved the way you told it too... just the right length and description to deliver it at the end. Aside from a grammatical error or two, it was a really smooth read. I hope if inspiration bites again that you'll share it with us.
Thanks! I do have another short story that I've been working on, as well as a bigger Baldur's Gate story, the twelve first chapters of which I've posted over the Attic (which sadly is down at the moment). Maybe I should post that here as well.
You owe me a new keyboard.
And possibly a new nose. When you snort tea down it laughing, it doesn't half hurt
And here I though that people would by now have learned not to drink near keyboards or monitors while reading stuff in the internet. Oh, well, I guess I'll just have to work overtime next week then.
#4
Posted 20 August 2010 - 09:00 PM
Thanks! I do have another short story that I've been working on, as well as a bigger Baldur's Gate story, the twelve first chapters of which I've posted over the Attic (which sadly is down at the moment). Maybe I should post that here as well.
That would be great! I'd love to see it.
Edit: Yes, it's really sad that the Attic is down at the moment. But we'll be happy to host your story!
Edited by Shadowhawke, 20 August 2010 - 09:01 PM.
Through lightning, travel shadow,
Through hell and all above,
Surviving sword and arrow,
Bound stronger by the love
***
And in the end a witness,
To where the death has lain,
Silent through the sorrow,
Where innocents lie slain