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#21 Shadowhawke

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Posted 13 May 2004 - 03:02 PM

Yeah, I'm playing catch-up with a lot of the finished stories here :wacko: So many!!!
Thanks, and I certainly will keep going!

Through lightning, travel shadow,
Through hell and all above,
Surviving sword and arrow,
Bound stronger by the love

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And in the end a witness,
To where the death has lain,
Silent through the sorrow,
Where innocents lie slain


#22 Celestine

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Posted 13 May 2004 - 07:54 PM

Dirk is an elf? I never realised that. :blink: :blink: Wow. So he's a sub-race of the elf or something? Star wolf - part wolf part elf? It kinda reminds me of the Silver Shadows in Elaine Cunningham's book, they were elf but can be wolf (i think) that melt into the shadow. Kinda intriguing. :P

I like the way you bring up Atheriel's relationship with Maria. Very smooth. And now I'm curious why she would betray her mistress and help Cyreth.

Write more soon. ^_^

#23 Shadowhawke

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Posted 13 May 2004 - 08:14 PM

Dirk is an elf? I never realised that. :blink: :blink: Wow. So he's a sub-race of the elf or something? Star wolf - part wolf part elf? It kinda reminds me of the Silver Shadows in Elaine Cunningham's book, they were elf but can be wolf (i think) that melt into the shadow. Kinda intriguing. :P

I like the way you bring up Atheriel's relationship with Maria. Very smooth. And now I'm curious why she would betray her mistress and help Cyreth.

Write more soon. ^_^

Yeah, heh, Dirk's an elf. :D . The Star Wolves, however, aren't part wolf part elf... they're... remaining 'unknown' at the moment, I guess :lol:
Nah, I am going to reveal what the Star Wolves are... just not now.
Thanks for the compliments! And yes, I will be writing more soon! ^_^

Through lightning, travel shadow,
Through hell and all above,
Surviving sword and arrow,
Bound stronger by the love

***

And in the end a witness,
To where the death has lain,
Silent through the sorrow,
Where innocents lie slain


#24 Shadowhawke

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Posted 19 May 2004 - 03:02 AM

Awwww.. cliff-hanger. *pout*

Excellent chapter and the prophecy keeps me in suspense. So the star wolf can see the future? or was it a gift by the gods? So what did they see in the cells? Come on, you know you have to reveal that soon. :P

Heh. Yes. :D

Some Star Wolves can see in the future... however, Halren isn't necessarily a Star Wolf, is he? ;)

Oh... and do I have to reveal it...? :lol:

Through lightning, travel shadow,
Through hell and all above,
Surviving sword and arrow,
Bound stronger by the love

***

And in the end a witness,
To where the death has lain,
Silent through the sorrow,
Where innocents lie slain


#25 Celestine

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Posted 22 May 2004 - 06:47 AM

great chapter. Edwin just cracked me up. hehe :lol: Like the teasing part on Dirk by the introduction of Hare'Dalis. Have to admit, I can't write him either.. the flowery language. :P

now what army? an army of undead? exciting. you must write soon. :)

#26 Shadowhawke

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Posted 22 May 2004 - 04:18 PM

Heh, Edwin's always cracked me up as well. Or Edwina, now, perhaps should I say? :lol:
But yeah, Haer's hard. I guess I tried. Oh well. :)
And yes! More coming up soon!

Through lightning, travel shadow,
Through hell and all above,
Surviving sword and arrow,
Bound stronger by the love

***

And in the end a witness,
To where the death has lain,
Silent through the sorrow,
Where innocents lie slain


#27 Celestine

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Posted 27 May 2004 - 05:35 AM

Shadowhawke, you could always PM MG or Viga to remove it, if you want to. :P

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Posted 27 May 2004 - 06:03 AM

Ah, Jolyth! There's no nitpicking from you! All just good, constructive criticism that I'm always appreciative of! 


Oh good! ^_^ I'll call off my bodyguard now! :lol:

Yes, indeed, you are right. I guess I always have some flow problems, and I thank you for pointing these out.


I feel ya there. Two months between posts for me. At any rate, you know I love your writing! I can't wait to see where this goes.

Heh... just like old times...


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#29 Celestine

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Posted 30 May 2004 - 04:57 PM

good chapter Shadowhawke, i enjoyed reading. :)

Good luck with your exams and write more soon. :)

#30 Shadowhawke

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Posted 31 May 2004 - 12:34 AM

Oh good!  ^_^ I'll call off my bodyguard now!  :lol:



Heh, you needn't have ever feared me stalking you down and torturing you with chemicals like you once threatened me with :lol:

I feel ya there. Two months between posts for me. At any rate, you know I love your writing! I can't wait to see where this goes.


Aww, thanks. I can't wait to finish writing!!! :)

Through lightning, travel shadow,
Through hell and all above,
Surviving sword and arrow,
Bound stronger by the love

***

And in the end a witness,
To where the death has lain,
Silent through the sorrow,
Where innocents lie slain


#31 Shadowhawke

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Posted 31 May 2004 - 12:36 AM

good chapter Shadowhawke, i enjoyed reading. :)



Thanks. I'm sorry for it being so short. I've got more, it's just not on this computer, which is a pain... <_< I'll transfer it soon, though. :)

Good luck with your exams and write more soon. :)


Thanks! I need the luck... definitely... :lol:

Through lightning, travel shadow,
Through hell and all above,
Surviving sword and arrow,
Bound stronger by the love

***

And in the end a witness,
To where the death has lain,
Silent through the sorrow,
Where innocents lie slain


#32 Celestine

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Posted 03 June 2004 - 07:32 PM

an enchanting chapter, Shadowhawke. :) and I see you are still dodging the star wolves identity. hehe.. you know you have to disclose that eventually. :P

#33 Shadowhawke

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Posted 03 June 2004 - 08:06 PM

an enchanting chapter, Shadowhawke. :) and I see you are still dodging the star wolves identity. hehe.. you know you have to disclose that eventually. :P

Heh... who says I do? :lol:
Thanks... I guess that that chapter's kind of a turning point, isn't it? After all, I'm giving you clues to the Star Wolves, aren't I? Doesn't that count? ;) :P
More later... when I finish my Chinese exam!! Thanks for the compliments...

Through lightning, travel shadow,
Through hell and all above,
Surviving sword and arrow,
Bound stronger by the love

***

And in the end a witness,
To where the death has lain,
Silent through the sorrow,
Where innocents lie slain


#34 MorningGlory

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Posted 03 June 2004 - 08:31 PM

an enchanting chapter, Shadowhawke. :) and I see you are still dodging the star wolves identity. hehe.. you know you have to disclose that eventually. :P

Heh... who says I do? :lol:
Thanks... I guess that that chapter's kind of a turning point, isn't it? After all, I'm giving you clues to the Star Wolves, aren't I? Doesn't that count? ;) :P
More later... when I finish my Chinese exam!! Thanks for the compliments...

I'm still playing 'catch-up', Shadow... But I wanted to take the opportunity to tell you that it's really good stuff you have here.. But I am still behind! :P (It's becoming a natural condition for me, I fear.. )

But keep it up, and the best of luck on your exams! I have my fingers crossed for you. ;)

MG

#35 Shadowhawke

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Posted 08 June 2004 - 04:06 AM

an enchanting chapter, Shadowhawke. :) and I see you are still dodging the star wolves identity. hehe.. you know you have to disclose that eventually. :P

Heh... who says I do? :lol:
Thanks... I guess that that chapter's kind of a turning point, isn't it? After all, I'm giving you clues to the Star Wolves, aren't I? Doesn't that count? ;) :P
More later... when I finish my Chinese exam!! Thanks for the compliments...

I'm still playing 'catch-up', Shadow... But I wanted to take the opportunity to tell you that it's really good stuff you have here.. But I am still behind! :P (It's becoming a natural condition for me, I fear.. )

But keep it up, and the best of luck on your exams! I have my fingers crossed for you. ;)

MG

Thankyou! I would have my fingers crossed myself... but for obvious reasons, I'll need them :) .

Heh, the end of 'Cry' is actually coming up soon... to spill into another. ;) . You can catch up then. :P

*Hugs* MG!

Through lightning, travel shadow,
Through hell and all above,
Surviving sword and arrow,
Bound stronger by the love

***

And in the end a witness,
To where the death has lain,
Silent through the sorrow,
Where innocents lie slain


#36 Celestine

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Posted 16 June 2004 - 06:04 PM

good chapter. I wonder who's controlling them? Any hints? ^_^

#37 Shadowhawke

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Posted 24 June 2004 - 08:25 PM

good chapter. I wonder who's controlling them? Any hints? ^_^

Heh, heh, you should know by now there won't be! ^_^ Sorry about not updating... it's the end of term and I just don't seem to have the time! Lucky the holidays are coming up, though!

Through lightning, travel shadow,
Through hell and all above,
Surviving sword and arrow,
Bound stronger by the love

***

And in the end a witness,
To where the death has lain,
Silent through the sorrow,
Where innocents lie slain


#38 Celestine

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Posted 04 July 2004 - 06:12 PM

Glad to see that you are still writing the story Shadowhawke. :) I'm still following the story, just don't have much comments. :)

fear burning in sapphire eyes.

Like this sentence, very poetic I think.

And the goddess let out a scream, and vanished.

Ah, the chapter climax. :) ^_^

Please continue writing, it has been a very interesting read so far.

#39 Shadowhawke

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Posted 06 July 2004 - 04:51 PM

Glad to see that you are still writing the story Shadowhawke. :) I'm still following the story, just don't have much comments. :)


Heh, that's okay! Just nice to know that there are people out there actually reading this :lol:


fear burning in sapphire eyes.

Like this sentence, very poetic I think.


Heh, thanks. Well... he was scared! :)

And the goddess let out a scream, and vanished.

Ah, the chapter climax. :)   ^_^


Really... the first STORY'S climax... heheh. Now it's just leading on...

Please continue writing, it has been a very interesting read so far.


Thanks for the encouragement. Rest assured I will... or I will at least try!

Edited by Shadowhawke, 06 July 2004 - 04:54 PM.

Through lightning, travel shadow,
Through hell and all above,
Surviving sword and arrow,
Bound stronger by the love

***

And in the end a witness,
To where the death has lain,
Silent through the sorrow,
Where innocents lie slain


#40 Celestine

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Posted 07 July 2004 - 01:33 AM

hehe.. that was funny and entertaining.. lol.

However, it is most interesting to note that it was most scandalous wedding in the whole history of Toril.

now, what would Boo say to that. :D ^_^ ^_^