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[Solar's Harper]

Yet again, I can only say positive things about the latest additon.

Quickly becoming a full-time fan of yours Orthodoxia.

I particularly love your humorous interludes, such as that tavern one with Neeshka , oh she is always up to something, her poor tail
And so the plot thickens again... and Ele'ena is again being a diplomat, a bit of a minx and a good leader, again...

Anyways I guess this is another positive review, and I sure hope you intend to keep the comical elements of your story, they're the bits I love most aside from the mystery and intrigue.

And I look foward to see what happens next with the characters, and yes I'm a rabid Neeshka fan as you would've guessed so sure do hope you explore areas the game never allowed, after all once you deviate a bit from the game, you've got a real masterpiece underway.

Keep up the good work Orthodoxia!

Yep, you're doublely rewarded. No price is too great

[Orthodoxia]

I live on humorous little interludes and Neeshka is the easiest one to abuse- I mean, write therefore she suffered the most.

And 'Plot' ?? Damn. I shall need to call upon special task force to eradicate the thing before it latches onto my chapters! Plot is reserved for MotB, devious plot I may say not for this silly little thing.

You'll get your weekly dose of chapters right up to chapter seven - because I've got it all nicely written up until then, but after that...

Anyway, thank you for the nice review

[Solar's Harper]

Come on people, I'm starting to feel like I'm hogging review space on this thread

Anyways, prepare yourself for another ego swirl Orthodoxia.
Loved it inmeasurablely!

Oh just to see Sand and Duncan act like children again, priceless.

And yes what is up with people and grabbing Neeshka's tail? *grins and snickers*

Well, since contact for Moria's gang was fried, almost scrapped plan B interesting how that one plays out.

It'll be interesting to see which way Ele'ena sways her loyalty, the thieves or the city guard?
Both are more evil than the BG2 choice of the admirable yet nefarious Shadow Thieves under Aran Linvail, and the dark, shady and extremely evil Vampire's Guild under seductive mistress Bohdi.

(ok so I'm almost sounding like an announcer, I'll stop there)

Heh! Anyways, look foward to the next one. And personally, I'm not sure whether to take Ele'ena's sudden focus in her magical abilites as a good thing or bad thing. Guess we'll find out soon enough.


Good work!

[Orthodoxia]

The cool thing about BG2 was that you didn't have the 'good' option when joining the guilds. Instead you had the 'bad' option and the 'really bad' option. It was fun

Neeshka's tail is in the line of grabbing therefore it will be grabbed constantly And Ele'ena is loyal to only two things: her freedom and her safety (she's a coward, what else do you expect from her? )

You can keep hogging the review space and for hogging it so faithfully until now I am inclined to show you the 'super mega cool' (yeah, right ) character sheet of the beloved main character for the MotB expansion story (yes, it's in planning). If you want to be spoiled that is

And Thanks

[Solar's Harper]

Heh! I'll consider that proposal Orthodoxia.

Anyways: Review...

Again great work without question, and that fight result for Elanee and Ele'ena sure has left an impression on this male mind

And count on a city tour to be so bothersome when Khelgar or Neeshka want to drag ya around for the uh... 'sights'. yeah that'll do

As always the faithful fan, I look foward to the next chapter.
Great Work!

Edited by Solar's Harper, 06 September 2007 - 05:07 AM.

[Shadowhawke]

Hey Orthodoxia! I'm sorry I haven't been around for a while; let's just say that rl has been incredibly busy. But I just came back today and read all of your new chapters in one swoop.

What can I say? I absolutely love the way you weave humour and laughter into everything. The interplay between Khelgar, Neeshka, Elanee, Ele'ena, Sand and Duncan are absolute gold, as well as the characters themselves. Ele'ena is such a likeable and fascinating heroine it's really easy to keep reading, and the tongue-in-cheek references to the plot are great.

Really, I'm basically enjoying this a lot. I probably won't be able to review as often as I have in the past, but know that whenver I read a new chapter/catch up on this fic in general, I'll definitely review because you deserve it . Please, keep writing!

[Orthodoxia]

Solar's Harper - From a personal experience I can safely say that being dragged around the town is not fun And the next chapter is likely going to be the last one in a while since chapter 8 is refusing to cooperate for the past two months My Muse is dead.

Shadowhawke - Thank you You can show up any time you have the moment to spare and I hope RL gets less hectic. I'm glad the story is pleasing to read (wouldn't be much point if it wasn't) and I want to finish it especially since MotB part is soooo much better.

On a side note (yes, I'm showing off) I've edited the first post of the story adding a link to the reference sheet of Ele'ena. Now you'll know precisely who is it getting into all that trouble.

[Solar's Harper]

Wow, is it just me or did this one hit me without warning?

Again nice work with the story so far Orthodoxia, a bit different to your usual style but I liked it nonetheless. I honestly can't clearly remember that familar, and I STILL hold the belief Ele'ena is NOT a coward... just... doesn't like to not be in the thick of things.......

Yay! More water elementals!
Heh, sorry couldn't help myself...

Anyways, City Watch eh? Well this'll be interesting, can't say I'm an expert on NWN2 but I can suggest straying a little from the main storyline, making some new content that was never in the game sink in as a sort of distraction from the greater scheme.
That doesn't count socialising though already seen more of that than is present in the game as it is.

Heh, Neeshka with a hatchet

Excellent work again, Orthodoxia

[Orthodoxia]

Yes, Neeshka with a hatchet sounds plausible, no And I can tell you that Ele'ena is... well all right, not exactly a coward but has cowardly tendencies (like running away and not taking responsibility and stuff )

My purpose (as the almighty author ) in this story is to make Ele'ena's life a living hell - therefore, anything she doesn't like is bound to happen. So, since she hates them so much, pervy water elementals are a must

Next chapter is supposed to have a detour of sorts from the game storyline but as I've said already, the bloody thing isn't cooperating and therefore won't be written any time soon

I aim to please

[Solstice]

*Casts Destroy Writer's Block*

I haven't read your tale in a while, so it took me some time to read it all anew. Solar hit everything dead-on, and there's not much else I can say. Ele'ena is a wonderfully likable character, and she and Neeshka are a great double-act. Loved the scene with Sand's familiar, too. There's no such thing as a cat that doesn't enjoy a belly scratch. Wonder how she's going to handle Casavir, though.

[Orthodoxia]

*Writer's Block Persists* (Damn! But thanks anyway )

Thanks for reading I don't know, I'd always thought that Ele'ena would be too much of a child (what with her behavior and all) in reader's eyes, I'm actually surprised that everyone (who reviewed that is) find her a likable adventurer.

Casavir? Next to Duncan, that would be a second or third father figure of course I like Casavir, but but there's no way he would ever think of the blue elf in that way

[Solar's Harper]

Heya Orthodoxia, nice to see a new chapter in and writers block gremlin taking yet another bullet to the head.

Noticed a few typos along the way; bothersome aren't they? Would rather put up with pervy water elementals than them typos methinks. ^_-

more then a match fro the redhead.

Yes, she was very cleaver indeed.

Meh, and on a side note, if Grobnar continues to talk about his *codpiece* so much... chances are he's going to find it chopped off the next morning.

Favorite line... "Well, yay."
At least Ele'ena hasn't changed much... though I can see several reasons why she wouldn't be too happy at being in one situation or another on the orc side of the field.

Anyways, loved it again... heh, including the very last bit about "that paladin"

Priceless.

[Orthodoxia]

Typos. *twitch* *twitchtwitchtwitchtwitchtwitch* Must burn all typos.

->Favorite line... "Well, yay."

Well, what did you expect the aspiring(not) adventurer to say in the face of the orc horde in full attack? And Ele'ena will change eventually. She'll change so much and so drastically (not to mention, not for the best) that I just know I'll be cursed and flamed for the rest of the eternity for turning her into a... but there's still time till that.

I hope no new gremlin will ambush me while I work on the next chapter

[Solar's Harper]

Somehow I hate Qara even more these-days.

Nicely done again Orthodoxia... uh, not intending to pun a last line quote mind you.
And I see there is no relenting in the attacks on Ele'ena's cowar--- err, I mean, anxiety. All the much better I guess, she wouldn't be herself without it.

Ugh, but I so wish that idea with Neeshka and the hatchet would go chasing Qara now.
I swear not even Ignus or fire elementals burned as much as her ego does.
She'd be really out of alignment if it was ever considered a factor.

[Orthodoxia]

Ah, but she's changing (slow as it may be), there was a tiny, tiny spark of excitement somewhere in there, yeah

Qara is a great character to hate, I simply love to hate her to bits - right after Bishop that is. And I don't think Neeshka is suicidal enough to chase that spawn from plane of fire with a mere hatchet

On a side note, MotB has inspired me so much that I practically itch to write a story there. I am highly tempted to finish Act 1 and then jump straight into the MotB story though that would cut some serious development in Ele'ena's character - she's ridiculously different there. For now, I'll concentrate on Act 1, then I'll see what to do next.

[Maekir]

Thanks for posting this fanfic. It was fun to read. I like the unwilling heroine aspect of the story. It added a sometimes apparent lack of concern/fear/etc of the main character or hero in similar stories. Which, in turn made the characters seem more believable. Looking forward to the next chapter.

[Orthodoxia]

Thank you and welcome to SHS

There will be only three more chapters and after that it's finished since I'm not likely going to write Act 2 and 3. If things go as planed I should finish Act 1 before the end of the year...if things go as planed

In the meantime, enjoy yourself

[Solar's Harper]

There will be only three more chapters and after that it's finished since I'm not likely going to write Act 2 and 3. If things go as planed I should finish Act 1 before the end of the year...if things go as planed

Awww, no more Neeshka or Ele'ena?

Yush, a bad day.

Anyway, review time:

Finally time for some R&R for the poor girl eh? I gotta admit this ironclad 'hero' would scare demons & ghosts if that was possible.

Still, nice to see Ele'ena pulling herself together for the challenge, however reluctantly as that be.

I really do wonder how much effort it'd take really just to sneak into Blacklake after all? Perhaps she could've avoided being used? Hmm, then again, better deadbeat and satisfied than sorry eh?

Heh, anyways, look foward to the next few Orthodoxia, and I'll be grinning at the prospect of more elementals Err, wait did I say that?

*cough* I meant uh... um, Shadows! Yes thats it.

[Orthodoxia]

Awww, no more Neeshka or Ele'ena?

Yush, a bad day.

Oh hush you , you'll have Aneele and Okku instead...and water elementals

Said 'ironclad hero' is a psychopath of untold proportions, I should now, I created him. You don't want to know what he did to Aribeth. Or to Sharwyn. Or to Linu, poor girl. Or to *shudder* Sand.

I really do wonder how much effort it'd take really just to sneak into Blacklake after all? Perhaps she could've avoided being used? Hmm, then again, better deadbeat and satisfied than sorry eh?

The sad thing is, only now had she thought of that. Silly Ele'ena

Heh, anyways, look foward to the next few Orthodoxia, and I'll be grinning at the prospect of more elementals Err, wait did I say that?

*cough* I meant uh... um, Shadows! Yes thats it.

Keep reading for soon it'll be over

[Dave Greenblade]

I haven't read it all yet, but it's great, Doxia! You're a great writer!